Might

[Fladian]

Funny. I knew I had this stored away in a place where I wouldn't find it, in the hope that I'd forget it. At that moment, the folder it was in it was too important to me to just delete it. So I kept it all around, in the hope that I'd forget about it someday, so I could delete it.
That was five years ago now. I haven't forgotten a single thing about it, and I can't believe I actually kept it.

I took a look at what I wrote, and saw that I made quite a few mistakes in it. Do not correct them, because I already see them easily. But I left them like this on purpose.

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<div align="center">You told me your life that year
And I've always had a listening ear

I could have much might
If I didn't had that fight inside

I loved you with all my heart
But in a way, I wasn't being smart

The love I had for you failed
My thoughts were now nailed

After a long time
I hadn't felt the urge to make you mine

Feelings were being made for an other
While many things were happening with my mother

The day has come and I confessed
While I was being repressed

I was respected
and rejected

Feelings cried inside
From a crumbling might</div>

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Why did I post this? Oh, I don't know. Perhaps because I am not the same person anymore as five years ago.

 

[Undead_Lives]

It's alright....Although I would have liked to have seen more....depth.
However, you wrote this 5 years ago, and I guess it cannot be expected.

 

[Fladian]

Depth? As in?
This was based on a real experience, and something I won't forget easily, or at all for that matter. Though there is one thing of it *points* that I can't recall.

One of them was completely described at Wc3c.

 

[Undead_Lives]

Depth as in more feeling. Good depth in a story is said to "move" people. That's what I meant.

 

[Fladian]

Well, it brought the point. There wasn't much room to go into details either, considering the length.

But then again, I'm not quite sure what I thought the moment I wrote it. Though I can recall the feelings, I can't recall what I was thinking.

 

[Undead_Lives]

At least you can remember somewhat of it. I remember very little of my childhood.

 

[Fladian]

Five years ago isn't really what I'd call my "childhood"

 

[Undead_Lives]

Nonetheless, I can't remember what happened five years ago anymore.

 

[Fladian]

I do. Several giant events has happened in my life, and two of those is mentioned in 'Might'.

 

[Undead_Lives]

Hm, interesting. I can see which ones.

 

[Falcoknight]

i see many mistakes lol no offence... partly the words you chose where too direct id love to share a poem i made, another day though....

 

[Fladian]

I could point so many mistakes out as well. Would they be spelling, grammar, mistakes or words that did, or did not come directly from the heart. I said that it is something that is written a long time ago, and correcting it would let the 'meaning' of it fade away.