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<blockquote data-quote="Undead_Lives" data-source="post: 107321" data-attributes="member: 5928"><p>Alright, I finally finished ALL of it, and I really enjoyed it. First, I'll point out the mistakes. Then I will talk about the stuff that I enjoyed.</p><p>Ok...</p><p>1. Don't forget the comma rule! When you write with quotes "bla bla bla," said Jimmy. DO NOT FORGET THE COMMA! <img src="data:image/gif;base64,R0lGODlhAQABAIAAAAAAAP///yH5BAEAAAAALAAAAAABAAEAAAIBRAA7" class="smilie smilie--sprite smilie--sprite7" alt=":p" title="Stick Out Tongue :p" loading="lazy" data-shortname=":p" /></p><p>2. When you use numbers just as they are (ie "3") don't. Instead, write the number as a word.</p><p>3. Replace OK with "alright". It sounds better.</p><p>4. Sometimes the context that you are writing in wains. Don't forget your tenses!</p><p>5. There is no clear narrarator to me when you talk about the champions. This is the only thing I really dislike about the story.</p><p>6. No.1 should be replaced with "number one", "top" or "best".</p><p>Things that I enjoyed:</p><p>1. I got really engaged in the story. The world was so real that I could see myself standing there, watching it all happen. It takes a good story to do that.</p><p>2. I liked how you switched between the story of the champions and the story of Lince. I liked the cliff hangers.</p><p>3. I really liked how you made so little spelling and grammar mistakes XD. The story was very easy to read.</p><p>4. I like where you ended it. It gives a lot of space to continue it. But you must continue it! You must! <img src="data:image/gif;base64,R0lGODlhAQABAIAAAAAAAP///yH5BAEAAAAALAAAAAABAAEAAAIBRAA7" class="smilie smilie--sprite smilie--sprite7" alt=":p" title="Stick Out Tongue :p" loading="lazy" data-shortname=":p" /></p><p>Overall, a GREAT story.</p></blockquote><p></p>
[QUOTE="Undead_Lives, post: 107321, member: 5928"] Alright, I finally finished ALL of it, and I really enjoyed it. First, I'll point out the mistakes. Then I will talk about the stuff that I enjoyed. Ok... 1. Don't forget the comma rule! When you write with quotes "bla bla bla," said Jimmy. DO NOT FORGET THE COMMA! :P 2. When you use numbers just as they are (ie "3") don't. Instead, write the number as a word. 3. Replace OK with "alright". It sounds better. 4. Sometimes the context that you are writing in wains. Don't forget your tenses! 5. There is no clear narrarator to me when you talk about the champions. This is the only thing I really dislike about the story. 6. No.1 should be replaced with "number one", "top" or "best". Things that I enjoyed: 1. I got really engaged in the story. The world was so real that I could see myself standing there, watching it all happen. It takes a good story to do that. 2. I liked how you switched between the story of the champions and the story of Lince. I liked the cliff hangers. 3. I really liked how you made so little spelling and grammar mistakes XD. The story was very easy to read. 4. I like where you ended it. It gives a lot of space to continue it. But you must continue it! You must! :P Overall, a GREAT story. [/QUOTE]
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