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A story I made
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<blockquote data-quote="Kem Rixen" data-source="post: 111231" data-attributes="member: 5832"><p>Despite being a Moderator I haven't looked over a story in ages, I suppose I'll start here. I'm going to break it into two parts, first I'll rate your story and sometime in the near future I'll go through and try to fix all the spelling and grammar problems. I'm going to need to make a new rating system I guess...</p><p><strong></strong></p><p><strong>Spelling/Grammar:</strong> 1/2</p><p>Sometimes you used proper grammar, but other times it really is lacking. Nothing much to say here.</p><p></p><p><strong>Storyline:</strong> 3/5</p><p>It feels like an average storyline, it has some very nice build-up around the monster part which saves it. Though I feel like the story sort of teetered off at the end, unfortunately it reminded me a bit of an old Scooby Doo cartoon.</p><p></p><p>Fred: "Now lets see who this monster really is."</p><p>*Pulls monster mask off*</p><p>All: *gasp* "Jenkins the gravedigger!"</p><p>Jenkins: "I would've gotten away with it too if it weren't for you meddling kids."</p><p></p><p><strong>Opening:</strong> 2/3</p><p>The opening, the first sentence is very important to a story, this one was quite nice, it set the setting but didn't over do it.</p><p></p><p><strong>Overall:</strong> 6/10</p><p>It has great potential, with some fixing it could become a great story.</p></blockquote><p></p>
[QUOTE="Kem Rixen, post: 111231, member: 5832"] Despite being a Moderator I haven't looked over a story in ages, I suppose I'll start here. I'm going to break it into two parts, first I'll rate your story and sometime in the near future I'll go through and try to fix all the spelling and grammar problems. I'm going to need to make a new rating system I guess... [b] Spelling/Grammar:[/b] 1/2 Sometimes you used proper grammar, but other times it really is lacking. Nothing much to say here. [b]Storyline:[/b] 3/5 It feels like an average storyline, it has some very nice build-up around the monster part which saves it. Though I feel like the story sort of teetered off at the end, unfortunately it reminded me a bit of an old Scooby Doo cartoon. Fred: "Now lets see who this monster really is." *Pulls monster mask off* All: *gasp* "Jenkins the gravedigger!" Jenkins: "I would've gotten away with it too if it weren't for you meddling kids." [b]Opening:[/b] 2/3 The opening, the first sentence is very important to a story, this one was quite nice, it set the setting but didn't over do it. [b]Overall:[/b] 6/10 It has great potential, with some fixing it could become a great story. [/QUOTE]
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Stories
A story I made
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