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<blockquote data-quote="Fladian" data-source="post: 125902" data-attributes="member: 5833"><p>The lack of time is no excuse for it, but the point just is, it wasn't the intention to let the main character have a great, unique or special personality. As a matter of fact, I was going for quite a cliche type, which I think I was more than successful in. Despite that I had to rush it in the end, I am quite pleased with how I described the personality of the main character. And despite my bad thoughts about it at the start, my opinion of the story improved dramatically much a while ago. As a matter of fact, if I didn't have rushed it, I am convinced I could place it among my best <em>short stories</em>, which obviously aren't my specialty. On the other hand, perhaps the rushing was something good in this case, as the fast pace in the story was fitting, and the main character(s) were also right for it. The cue that it would be a fast paced one was easily found out when I already showed that the main character (and his best friend) overslept and had to rush to get to school. The pace decreased after that and picked it up after they finished moving the stuff. </p><p>This doesn't mean I am completely satisfied with it. Not at all. If I remember right, Oscar never made an appearance (only his name) and one of the guys didn't show up during the moving. It was simply because I had a lack of time and it would only be a bad thing to introduce them and let them be swallowed by the sea. That's quite sad. Not to mention that all characters that were introduced were related to each other as (good) friends, if not having a relationship. The two - <em>mover</em> - friends were a piece of art from my side though; I am <em>completely</em> satisfied with them (which I am rarely). The conversations in the story seem to have gotten a good grip too and I am pleased that I managed to get a piece of their... way of speaking. I, Fladian, personally, curse a lot. This is partly thanks to a couple of friends who really get on my nerves - *cough*Franklin*cough* - though I don't really mind it. Combined with my bluntless, it is quite funny, actually. But despite that none of the characters in the story are based on someone specific, I am happy that I managed to grab their personality as good as I did.</p><p></p><p></p><p>I wouldn't mind, but it is not really necessary. As the last parts of the story clearly show; I was running out of time when I was nearing the end, giving me no time (at all) to correct my mistakes. There are also numerous use of similar words at specific places; those can easily be recognized as words I like using (in real life often too, but then again, I don't speak that much English outside of the internet, despite being completely fluent in it) but I obviously used them too much. Not too much of a problem now, but it is on the long term.</p><p></p><p></p><p>Despite my... opposite reaction of what I am saying now, I am more than pleased with how it turned out to be... for a short story. It is not that good compared to my longer ((un)finished) ones, but I'm sure it earned itself a nice place among my short stories. </p><p></p><p>Still, it is written in an hour, which forced me to increase the pace by several notches, which might have done it some good in the end. I am considering joining another similar contest some day again when one shows up. Especially because my general writing style is slow and constructive. But then again, outside of the internet, I am slow and constructive as well. =P</p></blockquote><p></p>
[QUOTE="Fladian, post: 125902, member: 5833"] The lack of time is no excuse for it, but the point just is, it wasn't the intention to let the main character have a great, unique or special personality. As a matter of fact, I was going for quite a cliche type, which I think I was more than successful in. Despite that I had to rush it in the end, I am quite pleased with how I described the personality of the main character. And despite my bad thoughts about it at the start, my opinion of the story improved dramatically much a while ago. As a matter of fact, if I didn't have rushed it, I am convinced I could place it among my best [i]short stories[/i], which obviously aren't my specialty. On the other hand, perhaps the rushing was something good in this case, as the fast pace in the story was fitting, and the main character(s) were also right for it. The cue that it would be a fast paced one was easily found out when I already showed that the main character (and his best friend) overslept and had to rush to get to school. The pace decreased after that and picked it up after they finished moving the stuff. This doesn't mean I am completely satisfied with it. Not at all. If I remember right, Oscar never made an appearance (only his name) and one of the guys didn't show up during the moving. It was simply because I had a lack of time and it would only be a bad thing to introduce them and let them be swallowed by the sea. That's quite sad. Not to mention that all characters that were introduced were related to each other as (good) friends, if not having a relationship. The two - [i]mover[/i] - friends were a piece of art from my side though; I am [i]completely[/i] satisfied with them (which I am rarely). The conversations in the story seem to have gotten a good grip too and I am pleased that I managed to get a piece of their... way of speaking. I, Fladian, personally, curse a lot. This is partly thanks to a couple of friends who really get on my nerves - *cough*Franklin*cough* - though I don't really mind it. Combined with my bluntless, it is quite funny, actually. But despite that none of the characters in the story are based on someone specific, I am happy that I managed to grab their personality as good as I did. I wouldn't mind, but it is not really necessary. As the last parts of the story clearly show; I was running out of time when I was nearing the end, giving me no time (at all) to correct my mistakes. There are also numerous use of similar words at specific places; those can easily be recognized as words I like using (in real life often too, but then again, I don't speak that much English outside of the internet, despite being completely fluent in it) but I obviously used them too much. Not too much of a problem now, but it is on the long term. Despite my... opposite reaction of what I am saying now, I am more than pleased with how it turned out to be... for a short story. It is not that good compared to my longer ((un)finished) ones, but I'm sure it earned itself a nice place among my short stories. Still, it is written in an hour, which forced me to increase the pace by several notches, which might have done it some good in the end. I am considering joining another similar contest some day again when one shows up. Especially because my general writing style is slow and constructive. But then again, outside of the internet, I am slow and constructive as well. =P [/QUOTE]
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