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johnfn

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Prepare to be PWNED!! Just kidding. ;)


She drove down the road in her jeep, Fred.
She had nicknamed the jeep Fred because it
reminded her of someone she knew named
Fred. Steady, dependable, but sometimes it
would break down for no reason. Around the
car, yellow dandelions were sprouting up
all over the place like the sun peeking out
behind a green cloud. She glanced on the
other side of the road. Tulips were growing
haphazardly in the middle of the road, even
though they were purposefully planted. She
brought her attention back to the road and
the huge hulking metal contraptions of
noise and pollution that seemed to live on
it. Funny how something nature made - even
as small as a dandelion - seemed to radiate
perfection, whereas humans' constructions
seemed only capable to destroy.



The man pulled the string on his contraption. At first it seemed
dead. He pulled it a few more times and then it suddenly sprung
to life with a loud roar. It buzzed and it snarled and it hissed and
it rattled. He didn't particularly like his job, but whenever he
thought of quitting he remembered his family. He realized, for
the first time, that most likely if he wasn't around that they would
probably be homeless.

Pushing those thoughts aside, he focused his attention on the thing
that thrashed around in his hands as if it had a life of it's own. These
things must make the loudest noise. His boss had directed him to cut
down trees in that direction, which he had accompanied with a vague
gesture. He looked at the trees around him. They looked utterly random,
at least to him. He called the gesture up in his mind and tried to follow it,
but then almost ran into a marked tree. That was easy enough... He started
cutting it down, but something felt wrong. A pang of doubt ran through his mind.
His intuition, which his parents had told him a long time ago never to
doubt, was bothering him. Something wasn't quite right with this tree...
but he shoved his doubts aside and continued cutting.

Then several things happened at once. The saw hit a small but strong
metal spike inside the tree. The saw's blades were instantly grinded away,
and the strong forward momentum of the saw was rebounded back at him,
because of the spike. As all this happened, time stopped. The man
realized that someone had put a spike in the tree to protect it, probably
some crazy environmentalist. He realized how ironic this was, because now the
saw wasn't going to kill the tree, it was going to kill him. Then time
continued flowing, and his realization became reality.



Much deeper in
the forest, someone
pounded another
spike into a tree.
A pang of doubt
had ran through
his mind when
he heard the chainsaw
fire up. A friend had
assuaged his doubts,
however.
Maybe he was killing
people, but if he
didn't do it, the
loggers were
going to
kill them all.



Far away, in a house overlooking the forest, a man stepped outside on to his balcony. The forest with the sun setting behind it sure did look beautiful. Maybe he should paint a picture.



Ah, I think I might have to write out an interpretation of my story tomorrow. There's a lot going on behind the most obvious storyline. :)
 
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Undead_Lives

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Since when did YOU get here???
This is MY turf, you have your own at wc3c! :p
Great, now I have to add you to the people that are listed...and Flad bloody well made it so....descriptive. Bleh. :p
Oh and next time john, maybe inform me you're coming...you know...a little earlier than the deadline :p

One thing though...one of the rules was you couldn't have posted it on the forum before..but since you haven't posted it here....hm, I'll talk to Flad about it.
Also, who directed you here john?
 

johnfn

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Since when did YOU get here???
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Right now :yay:

Oh and next time john, maybe inform me you're coming...you know...a little earlier than the deadline :p
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That's me, procrastinate 'till the deadline, actually, I usually procrastinate 'till after the deadline...

One thing though...one of the rules was you couldn't have posted it on the forum before..but since you haven't posted it here....hm, I'll talk to Flad about it.
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Flad told me that I could use a previously written story.

Also, who directed you here john?
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Death told me to do it yesterday after telling me about it a month ago. I just said 'why not' and submitted.

Don't worry - I probably wont stick around for long. ^^




I might put a little analysis here later, though.
 
Wow lol, I read your story and I never realized it was John who had written it - it's just I'm used to 'the usual' and don't expect new members. Well you better stick around or I'll have to glue you to the wall. :yay:

Anyways nice story. Too bad I'm not an environmentalist or a tree hugging hippie. :D
 

johnfn

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Here's a little analysis since I don't think many people picked up on what I did.


The story thing had a two themes running through it. One theme is obviously Nature vs Human. The story said that the tulips were planted haphazardly, just like the trees that the guy goes through (he mentions how random they are). Another theme is misinterpretations. The environmentalist near the end of the story thought that loggers were going to kill them all, but in reality they probably aren't. The guy at the end was the biggest clue because he thought that the forest looked beautiful when in reality there was a murder just a little bit before. And a little plot twist I put in was that the person at the beginning of the story thought that humans were only capable to destroy could be wrong (this ties in with both themes), because the tulips were planted just like nature would have planted them.
 

Alekill

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it is a very nice story i liek it alot nature is cool but so are humans and humans area natur so is a building natural?
 

Undead_Lives

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Uh....what now? I don't understand what you're saying Alekill...
I remember reading this at wc3c. It's good, but I won't comment on it more than that.
 

Alekill

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I'm saying if humans are natural arn't are building cars etc natural too?
Think about it if we see an anthill we think that its natural. But those ants build the anthill the same as if we huamns were to build a car but for dome reaon we thinik that the car is not natural
 

Undead_Lives

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Ya but what did the ants build the anthill out of? Dirt. What do we build out of? Manufactured materials. The fact that they are manufactured by different means, unnatural means, is why they are not natural.
 
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Undead_Lives

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What your saying is that everything is natural. But it's not.
If we didn't have the technology to process stell, where would you find it? You wouldn't. Steel is made up of a few different metals. It's not natural. Along with most of the other manufactured products.
 
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